would you continue reading?

lit fic/realistic fiction; thus no crazy world building, just awful reality. this is a first draft so i’m aware of possibly superfluous & am in the process of mapping out a second (structural) draft rn — just wanted to know if this is something? anything? that could plant a seed of intrigue for those who are fans of the genre. or maybe those that aren’t!

mostly along writing style/characterization because i’m not particularly throwing anybody into a Plot.

feedback/critique requested + politeness welcome!